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My god this is heartbreaking. Your prose is so poetic in this chapter. It feels sung because of the repetition and structure. Was that deliberate?

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Definitely. Hopefully it has a sense of accumulating energy. I’m not rereading now, but I believe one of the paragraphs right at the end is a single, very long breathless sentence. If it’s not, then it should be. 🙏

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